"People who cannot distinguish between good and bad language, or who regard the distinction as unimportant, are unlikely to think carefully about anything else."
A couple days ago a young lady submitted to my Writers Group for criticism a 100-word poem she had recently composed. One of the first responses she received is appended below:
No, I was told I should not duplicate without permission what was offered in a private Writers List posting. So I won't copy and paste it here. I'll just say that the critique was a bit harsher than those usually offered on Writers in these tamer, more boring, and less honest days.
This critique was offered by Meredith, a long-time cyber-acquaintance of mine who happens to be a holder of advanced university degrees and (I think) a one-time teacher of Creative Writing.
Of course such forcible language spurred several seemingly-supportive replies decrying the harshness of the critique and assuring the poet that her poem was just fine, implying that she should continue on her personal poetic course.
And I couldn't help remembering the many times over the past two decades when, as a member of the group, I had submitted stories and received back some (extremely helpful) negative comments from Meredith. One of those is stuck securely in my memory. I had written a short story wherein the main character was taking a trip in a Greyhound Bus, and at one point I wrote: "The Greyhound rounded a sharp corner and raced to its assigned slot, where it wheezed, coughed, and slid to hissing stop."
Good ol' Meredith critiqued: "Jesus Christ, Gene, if you want the reader to know the bus stopped at the terminal, for God's sake, just say the bus stopped at the terminal."
What? I thought when I read that, and I objected (to myself) ...but that was some good writing. Here was this woman telling me to say it simply, that I should delete all such fanciful language and use plain everyday words.
A few years later, Stephen King made how-to-write history by passing on that phrase familiar to all modern would-be writers, "Kill your darlings!"
And Meredith helped me through many more hard times in my writing attempts. I learned that it was her seemingly pedantic no-nonsense commandments that aided me much more than did all the supportive "Good jobs" and other such bland encouragements. (Not that I didn't preen and exult after receiving them.)
I guess my point is that a few short, loud barks at blatant mistakes is more valuable than an hour of kittenly purring at the pudding.
And, yes, I know there's something wrong with that figure of speech.
Did You Know . . .?
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Note: I despise this made-up, poor excuse for a word, and lose all esteem for anyone who uses it.
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"The greater part of the world's troubles are due to questions of grammar."
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